The world has gone so dark
The tubelight seems so bright
The window is so blurred and hazy
It obscures my eyesight.
So I push it out of way
And the WIND comes rushing in
And not far and not long
Are all his folks and kin.
FIRE shows his presence
And flashes across the sky;
EARTH sends her fragrance
As fast as it can fly;
Never to lag behind
Is WATER at her best
She showers drops on your face
To prove she’s better than the rest.
Your heart lifts and soars,
Loud aloud it sings
You smile because you realize-
It’s raining!
Hypotenuse 
No matter how old you are or how young, the first drop of water from the heavens that lands on your face will bring you the utmost degree of joy…
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you captured all “elements” in the rain – nice!
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is the incorporation of elements making d poem better? does it have any effect?
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it does make it better – to me at least – i am more of a “classical” poetry person than a “contemporary” -so to me the word “tubelight” was more out of place than the elements – but that’s just me – it does not reflect on your style – to me every thing that god has made is “perfect” and incorporates all elements in some manner or the other – good attempt
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